Twidilee's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[A Bid For Freedom]

Other than picky grammar corrections, great work.

It was pretty good. I was distracted by the various grammatical errors though. Semicolons are only to be used when there are fully developed, complete sentences on both sides. For example:

Maybe I'm just a post for the other guests to lean upon; somebody to prop up the roof should they bring it down upon themselves.

This is incorrect. The second is not a complete sentence. There is no verb for the subject. Also, Colons (:) are only used to begin a list or to define whatever is before the colon. for example "There was only one thing I wanted: to be like everyone else" is correct, for the second defines the "thing" that is wanted. However...

... in the grandest hall of the city: there are checkerboard floors...

is incorrect. And following this--

there are checkerboard floors as far as the eye can bother; open buffets for the loose belted ; a beautiful chandelier...

-- the first is a complete sentence, but the following fragments are incorrect uses of semicolons.

As for positive things, your vocabulary is remarkable and I loved the tone. Look into some of the more technical grammatical rules (just for class and readability purposes) and keep up the great work.

[Guy plays Xbox]

Redundance

The "turd of the week" title kind of speaks for itself, so I'm going to say something positive.

Although I couldn't hear the audio, the lip synching looked decent. Like you actually thought about it. So... keep up the good work. You can always go on my page and look at my first animation... It's awful.

[The End. Episode I]

ummmmmmmm

don't animate until you can learn grammar. "I wish you where ran over"? Where or were? Ran over? It's okay to be bad at grammar but if you can't type the English language, perhaps it's a good idea not to add speech bubbles. And fix the walking. And the plot. And the voice acting.

Positive of the day: Nice backgrounds.

DJFry responds:

Yeah, nice...

[There She Is!! step4]

I agree with that

It reminds me of the way a lot of couples are treated, may it be homosexuals, people with different religions, people of different races (like blacks and whites used to be forbidden to be together). It's sad.

GREAT FLASH I almost cried

[Inception in about 1 min]

...oh thats it.

Oh wow, that's the whole video. It'st he van, motion tweening towards a block of blue flash symbol. Reeeeally... reeeeaaaaaallllllllyyyyyy slowly.

I guess its more about the joke than the animation. I'm a beginner myself. Good luck while you grow and change as an animator.

Sethdd responds:

I'm not a beginner... I made this to look crappy on purpose.

[Chibi Paranoia]

woot

this would be a cute thing for like your website or something, but on flashportal people don't know the context and usually this site features full length flashes. You're not alone though. There are people who do loops on flash portal. It's cute, to say the least. :D

DARKRYAN responds:

I KNOW. I'M ACTUALLY JUST DOING RANDOM THINGS UNTIL I CAN GET THE VOICES FOR "ZELDA: O.O.S. EP.-3" ON IT. XD.